Tuesday, May 15, 2007

One Deep Breath - Nurture

taut red orbs
warm in my hands
ripe tomatoes


Tanka

I watch her skating
Solo for the first time
Tears of pride mix
With tears of vague regret
That well from a future place

Strauss
15th May 2007

This weeks theme, at One Deep Breath, was Nurture.

7 comments:

Tammy said...

Strauss, you did an amazing job here. "Taut red orbs" and the emotion in your Tanka was really a pleasure to read.

written voize said...

You had my mouth craving for some tomatoes. Great tanka, enjoyed the read.

Colorful Prose said...

Both are beautiful.

Crafty Green Poet said...

I love the ripe tomatoes in your haiku and the emotion in your tanka - excellent!

Becca said...

"taut red orbs" is a wonderful line!

And your second haiku brought a lump to my throat...beautiful!

Patois said...

So perfectly described and enticing, your first. Your tanka? So easy for me to relate. I love your tanka's last line.

Mandy said...

nice ones
i do think you need to drop the capitalized letters at the beginning of lines.